Tuesday, April 27, 2010

TEASER. Hells yes.

Long time, since I posted a teaser. But here, it is...(Ronni's back!)


*snipped*

22 comments:

iman said...

wow this is really powerful. it makes wonder what happened last summer and what's going on in this scene (and the current summer).

awesome job!

Kaitlin Ward said...

Really nice tease. I especially liked the line "Small minty gasps". Beautiful!

Karla Nellenbach said...

you paint very vivid scenes :)

Becca said...

OMG This is gorgeous. <33 Very emotional.

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Nicki Leigh said...

First, purple hair and mint icecream are awesome! Now I want icecream.

I love the voice in this and the description is very vivid. While I am not a fan of sand, I could feel it between my toes when the MC walked to the shack.

I'm curious to know what's going on.

Glen Akin said...

I did comment, but for some reason I think maybe my comment got lost somehow. Your teaser is amazing. Your MC's voice is very touching. Man, can't wait to read more

Jill Wheeler said...

Awesome voice. So did she pick up some random ice cream on the beach? Kinda gross.

Tahereh said...

oh, bee.

that was powerful.

that was so real.

beautiful!

cheyanneyoung said...

Great tease! I had my hair dyed stealthy like that when I was in high school =)

Annie McElfresh said...

Gahhhh soooo good! :) Keep up the good work, it totally sucked me in!

Angie said...

Wow this is really great! I love how you portray your character and the images of the beach are just awesome! This is a really great tease. :)

LizPage said...

So emotional, and the voice is so addicting. I love this!

Sage said...

I love how you describe everything, visually and by scent, throughout the scene.

La-La-La-Laurie said...

This is gorgeous. The first paragraph one me over. It was so sensory.

La-La-La-Laurie said...

That was supposed to say WON me over. I'm not that big of a moron (usually)

Karla Calalang said...

This is so beautiful! I love it!

bethany said...

Love the details and emotion!

Ellen said...

Oooo, I want mooore! I like that you included more senses than just visuals, you can almost feel the sand :)

Kathy Bradey said...

You write so so so beautifully.

houndrat said...

This was really lovely, Bee! Great imagery.

corrinejackson said...

I loved this image "I push my feet into the sand, loving how the little grains snake around my toes, then fall out of the gaps." Nicely done!

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